Riccarton house

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Riccarton House

I am the ghost, I am friendly but I don’t like anybody who ruins my precious house. I know this mansion better than anyone because I used to own the house. but I died and that is how I am a ghost.

I turn my invisibility on so no one can see me. I slowly glide down the creaky, narrow stairs of the attic.

During day time people were getting toured around the house so I went quiet. I snuck up on them and I followed them to see if they were keeping the house safe and they were.

The next people came soon enough and it was Ruma Toru, I heard the lady that was touring them saying they were very smart, in fact they were as smart as that lady. They knew heaps about what happened to my family. I kept following them they were scared going into my bedroom they couldn’t believe the bed was so small, they looked at my cream leather gloves that my husband got me for my wedding present. I laughed in my see through head. She told them about my room and all of them said it was cold, that’s because of me, although I felt bad and sorry for them.

They moved on to the kitchen and she showed them all of the accessories that we had to use like  a potato crusher and other accessories.

They went up into the attic I let them go up the creaky stairs first, then I follow behind them. they touched some stuff I didn’t mind.

They moved out of the house and they all had a good time in my beautiful house that I used to own. I like how they made it really big it is a better place to live in for me.

just after I say that, some dodgy people come in. I don’t like the look of them. they come walking in my house I spy on them, they hide a bomb. They have a detonator which they hold and press to blow up the bomb. I TURN MY INVISIBILITY OF!!!! I scream “Hey what are you doing? Get out of here.” They blow up all of the house, but I didn’t die because I couldn’t. I finally realised they were suicide bombers. I am as sad as a homeless person because I am now. I will have to go to look for a house to live in I don’t know where though.

The End

                                              

WALT write a recount focussing on using adjectives and correct punctuation.

 Watch the following video of an African safari African Safari. Now imagine that you are on the safari and describe one of your days in detail. Write it like you did the chimpanzee in space recount. Think about what you can see all the animals, what they look like in detail, how they smell and what they would feel like. The plants, how they feel, the temperature of the sun the dusty road. Then talk about the people that you meet. I can’t wait to read your writing and picture in my mind what you see. Start writing here……

 I am in my canoe with no shoes rowing away following another person rowing his boat as well. I looked at his shoes and then I said “what are those?” The other person said “what you can’t say much look at your awesome shoes.” I was coming off the canoe and I hopped onto the land. I saw all of the elephants they all had rough skin as rough as sandpaper. I went to a cheetah cause I saw it and I patted it and hugged it it was as furry as furriest fur in the world. Then I went under water with a snorkel and checked out all of the fish under the water. They were swimming.

WALT use adjectives and correct punctuation

I am dreaming I can see my family in my dream I wake up “ohhhh boring old spaceship again” “I wish that my dream came true any time soon”

I keep getting closer and closer to earth even though I don’t know where I am. “Man I can’t wait to get to Earth”. “I am bored” I say to myself. “WOW OMG I can see the milky-way”. “Ouch the sun is in my eyes it feels like boiling water on my forehead “every morning I get it it is unfair”

“I see earth!!!!!!!!!!! WWWWOOOOWWWW!!!!! Yeah!!! O.k calm down” I say to myself I am getting closer and closer I get to the the atmosphere I am there i'm shaking and shaking and shaking really fast, my heart is pounding really fast like a rocket I am really stressed out right now. Aaaaahhhhh!!!!! I finally land I get out what has happened

To our planet? I ask to myself.

All the concrete building’s, everything all of the green grass, all of my sister’s my family, “where are they” My heart stops pumping really fast. Oh I am really sad all I wanted to happen is to see my family.

I am walking all over the earth looking for my family but I look in our home they aren’t there I don’t know where they are I saw a robot I think that he would of killed all of the people even my family and sisters but he didn’t then I just died of old age and then I went to Heaven luckily.

     

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