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Friday, May 10, 2019

It was a lovely day with me and my friends it was as sunny as the world could ever get. It was just me Charlotte and Jack that was going on a long bush walk. It was lovely. We sat down in the middle of it to have our lunch/picnic. I looked away at a bird I could hear in the background of my two friends talking i looked over to try see Where this mysterious creature was. Ooh! jackpot found it Hey look at this crow guys and it has a bit of red on it's beak! There was no answer, I turned around and both of them were gone. I shouted their names: "Jack!, Charlotte!", still no answer.

suddenly in a very short time it became foggy, It took around about 10 seconds in fact. Suddenly a shrill cry echoed in the mist, the horrible screechy sound traveled through my ears leaving a daunting feeling about what might it be, It sounded like a little girl just broke her arm, it also sounded like Charlotte... So I thought about whether to go into the mist or not It was really foggy at this point of time. I tried to wrap my head around going into the fog. Then I just thought stuff it stuff it i'm going in whether I like it or not. (I didn't like it) I walked into the mist it was very strangely aligned because If you walked into the fog then it would be really cold and damp but when you stepped out it was a normal boiling hot day. I walked slowly into the fog I heard nothing. It was like an awkward silence but except i was shivering in my boots! I just wanted my mum at the moment. I was afraid that I was never going to see her again. She would wonder where I went and what about Charlotte and Jack. Suddenly the awkward silence broke but this time it was an evil laugh It sounded like Jack this time but it was coming from directly behind me, like right behind my head. I turned around so slowly because I didn't want to see What it was. It's was like I was in one of those movies where they turn around real slowly. It was jack he said to me "everything is going to be OK" in a soft calming voice but i didn't find it very calming. I replied What? Sluring the word in panic while huffing and puffing.
He said come with me ill show you something still in a calming voice. I was worried and scared at the same time. I followed him very slowly and carefully, crouch walking looking in all directions at all times in a very cautious way. In a very short time before I started to squint my eyes through the fog as I saw something, It was Charlotte I think. She said "help me!" I could hear shakiness in her voice. I started to run because I saw something holding her very roughly. It told me to stop. It looked like it had a mask on,like those ones that those plague doctors wore! Then out of the blue that same crow with the little bit of red on it's beak glided over to the unpleasant creatures shoulder and sat there. It had very bony hands and pointed at me and said"come over"with his one finger. I didn't listen and started to run, he dropped Charlotte and ran after me He said"Archie"In a very creepily way I then ran faster I was thinking in my head how does he know my name. It happened, he catched me and said quietly in my ear Time for a feast I said NO, LEAVE ME ALONE!!!!!!!! Then I Woke up, Then sat up in my bed very quickly and looked around to see if I was safe. Auuugh I was safe Then I went back to sleep. I had the best dream of my life I was in candyland. I woke up the next day and went to school and told Jack and Charlotte about my dream and they both said that they had the same exact dream but in their perspective. I didn't want to sleep in that bed again!


2 comments:

  1. Hey Zion
    I really like how you used you language features. Also how you make it a mystery. I cant wait to see more of the story.
    Thanks
    Dylan

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  2. Hey Zion
    I really like adjective A shrill cry echoed in the mist, Thats Amazing

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